11. Something Unusual
Hmm.. about me? Well, I once ate fish brain -_-
Hmm.. about me? Well, I once ate fish brain -_-
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well, hello there. today has been hectic, to say the least. So (hehe, you know what that means. Yup, a rant about my day. Skip down below if you want to see a piece of actually writing.), I woke up pretty early today morning, and went strawberry picking at my friend's house. Well, see, I get paid for every quart I pick, so I guess I do earn money from it. ;) Well, that went from early morning till afternoon, and then at he place she gave us all a music lesson. (us meaning me, a few of her siblings, and some of the other girls who came to help pick strawberries) It was interesting. hehe....then we went down to their creek, which was really fun. It's been raining a lot lately, so the water level was high and the current was strong. Anyways, we went in about knee-deep, then stopped. Then a little bit later my friend went in about half-way into the creek where the current was a little stronger. We watched her and she was like "Oooh! This is soooo awesome! You guys should really come in too!" (I may or may not exaggerate when talking about how someone speaks ;) And we were like "Eh," so then she was like "Noo, just come on in!"
So finally I worked up the courage to have a little adventure :) I went in the current a little, and might I say it was fairly strong but so awesome! I mean, standing there the current really pushed against you, but you had to plant your feet on the ground to stay put. It was so thrilling. I mean, that's not the kind of thing I do on a daily basis. lol It was like, "This is God's world, and I'm standing in it." I mean, that's how I felt. So then her brothers came and then they tramping through the trees (note to self: never tramp through the trees when wet) looking for a bird or something. I don't know, I was just following. And then it flash stormed so we all came out of there. It was really fun. And then I went home, got changed, then went to the dentist. Yeah, fun. I love going to the dentist. *sarcasm*
Anyways, I was having a bit of writers block (ughhhhh), then yesterday I just felt the urge to write. And I came up with a little beginning. I'm not sure if I should continue working since I have like a gazillion WIP. (works in progress) jk. Oh well, and if I should, should I make it a long story or a short one? Anyways, read it here and then tell me what you think :)
Adalia Parker sighed and relaxed on the chair.
Her eyes darted to and from the chess game on the table as she watched her
brother’s moves intently. Suddenly she saw a loophole in which she could trap
him. Moving her queen piece sideways, she jumped up and yelled, “Checkmate!”
Aden, Adalia’s younger brother, groaned and
buried his face in his hands. Adalia danced around him celebrating her victory.
“How in the world did you make me lose?”
Aden asked disbelievingly.
“Believe me, you wouldn’t trust me if I told
you.” She said with a smirk.
He debated on whether to believe her for a minute,
and then shrugged, “Whatever.” He sighed and absentmindedly fiddled with one of
the playing pieces. They sat in
comfortable silence for a moment.
“Hey, Aden,”
Adalia suddenly said.
“What, Lia?”
“You want to go to McDonalds?”
“Huh?” He asked incredulously.
“No seriously.”
“Um, no. There are a lot of more things that
would be worthwhile doing than hanging out with my older sister.”
“You do realize how immature that sounds,
right?” She said with a cocky grin plastered on her face.
“Ugh.” Aden spat.
“So, you want to go? It’s on me.”
Aden glanced at the clock. “Oh, all right. But
we have to be back by 7:30. I’m going to flip if I miss the football game.”
Adalia shrugged lightly, “Don’t find that too
hard to believe.”
Aden glared at her, and then slipped on a well-worn
hoodie. “Fine, let’s get going.”
So, what do you think? At first I had Aden and Adalia as twins, but then I just made them brother and sister. Comment! Have a wonderful day! (not getting wet ;)
~Autumn
The relationship seems really easy but competitive, like I'd imagine and real brother and sister to be most of the time :)
ReplyDeleteYeah. that's what I was going for :) Thanks!
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I liked it :)
ReplyDeleteIt was catchy and enjoyable, if you wrote more I'd probably read it :D
One more thing, don't worry about the WIP's every writer needs to take breaks sometimes, it's our way of branching out and enjoying ourselves without putting to much weight on it :)
-Sarah
Thank you soo much!
DeleteAww, thank you :) That is so true.
This is a neat beginning! I like how their relationship is really realistic, and gives that 'sibling feel'. I think this could be a wonderful beginning to an awesome story! I totally understand about WIP! I feel almost guilty to my older characters for leaving them forgotten...I'm still trying to figure out if that is normal or not...
ReplyDeleteI definitely want to read more of this:)
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Thank you! Yeah, I'm glad it has that feel to it. hehe, it's very normal ;)
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